If you are working on this for a class or personal project, here are some tips for adding more detail:
Since I can't see the video, I’ve drafted a detailed story based on a used in many educational writing modules: a "Small Moment" story featuring a clear conflict and resolution. The Midnight Glitch 16638mp4
Writing a Personal Narrative for Kids - Episode 4: Writing a Draft If you are working on this for a
Add a moment where the character talks to themselves or a pet to show their internal stress. The screen flickered
Leo’s finger hovered over the "Submit" button on the class portal. 99%. His heart hammered against his ribs like a trapped bird. Suddenly, the hum of the computer changed to a high-pitched whine. The screen flickered. A bright green line sliced through the progress bar, and the text scrambled into unreadable symbols.